06:24: I guess this is arguable because a new school year is likely only just about to start, but shouldn’t this be in the past tense? Both translations of the original series did that, and we see sakura in full bloom, so spring is already here.
06:35: Haa-chan turned the other two girls into middle schoolers, not herself. (See the beginning of episode 50 for more context.)
17:48: Hmm, I think she’s listing several separate things: she saw the distant past; and she met A (btw consider “saw” or “encountered” to make it more one-sided); and she met B. Rather than: she met A and B in the distant past. In fact, we’ve seen one of the meeting scenes very recently! Except uhh it seems as though the scene was a memory but the dialogue is new/current, otherwise it doesn’t make sense. (They seem to like making flashbacks that don’t make sense if taken literally; >graduation picture) Besides, we also kinda know that Hisui didn’t exist until recently.
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Chortos-2
Thanks!
06:24: I guess this is arguable because a new school year is likely only just about to start, but shouldn’t this be in the past tense? Both translations of the original series did that, and we see sakura in full bloom, so spring is already here.
06:35: Haa-chan turned the other two girls into middle schoolers, not herself. (See the beginning of episode 50 for more context.)
17:48: Hmm, I think she’s listing several separate things: she saw the distant past; and she met A (btw consider “saw” or “encountered” to make it more one-sided); and she met B. Rather than: she met A and B in the distant past. In fact, we’ve seen one of the meeting scenes very recently! Except uhh it seems as though the scene was a memory but the dialogue is new/current, otherwise it doesn’t make sense. (They seem to like making flashbacks that don’t make sense if taken literally; >graduation picture) Besides, we also kinda know that Hisui didn’t exist until recently.
serenae (uploader)
Thanks as always, I will review those places!
rusty_mst
ty!